National Poetry Month: The Progressive Poem

Tara Smith

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Welcome to day 8 of the Progressive Poem, started by Irene Latham,

the Kidlitosphere Progressive Poem began in 2012 as a way to celebrate National Poetry Month (April) as a community of writers.

Margaret Simon  kindly  volunteered to organize the poem roster for 2020.  And Donna Smith made the whole exercise  a bit more challenging by providing two lines for Irene to choose from for the first line of this year’s poem. So, we have a  “choose your own adventure” progressive poem!

Yesterday, Catherine Flynn offered these two lines for me to consider:

A whispering breeze joins in our song (Option A)

OR

I step onto warm sand, strumming my tune (Option B)

We’ve had two blissful days of Spring with lovely breezes here in upstate New York, after a very long Winter, so that’s where my heart took me.  Here’s the poem so far:

Sweet violets shimmy, daffodils sway
along the wiregrass path to the lake.
I carry a rucksack of tasty cakes
and a banjo passed down from my gram.

I follow the tracks of deer and raccoon
and echo the call of a wandering loon.
A whispering breeze joins in our song

Here are are my two choices for Carol Varsalona at Beyond Literacy Link: 

Adding a melody to follow along .(Option A)

And night melts into a rose gold dawn. (Option B)

 

 

 

13 thoughts on “National Poetry Month: The Progressive Poem”

  1. Lovely! I like that in one you showed that time was passing. On the other hand, I like the lilt of the “melody” that’s included. Our weather has been wonderful, too, but cold is coming, again! Have a wonderful day, Tara!

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  2. Both of these are beautiful. I know which one I like just a little bit better, so we’ll see if Carol goes in that direction. Enjoy those warm breezes!

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  6. Very nice choices! Love the image of night melting into dawn. But stressing that melody is beautiful too.

    Can I ask you a favor? Somewhere along the way a “the” got added to my line. Would you mind changing it back to “I follow the tracks of deer and raccoon” (I know, it shouldn’t bug me, but it does!)

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  9. I’m hoping the ability to leave two options makes it easier to write your (my) line. Did you find that? These are both lovely. I’m trying to guess which one Carol will choose. I think I know… And I think I have a preferred option. But both are lovely.

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  11. You picked the line I would have picked – though bother were great. I love both your lines. I truly don’t have a favorite here. Let’s go see what Carol thinks!

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